Monday, February 08, 2010

Silent Mourning

Lost in a sunless world-
She was walking down the path of despair.
Knowing not when she would return-
To a place where sense prevailed.

Not even a million tear-drops-
Could fill up the gaping chasm within her soul.
She wished the emptiness-
Would consume her whole.

Shadows followed her every step-
She couldn't run away even if she tried.
The good times and the bad times-
All flashed before her eyes.

Devoid of any warmth or emotion-
She was just like an ice-sculpture.
To her the world had ceased to exist-
For he wasn't in it any longer. 




P.S: This should be a perfect example of a post made in a hurry.But I'm working on a story and it should be finished by next week...given I've the time to sit down and work on it.Anyway folks do share your thoughts on this one.Till then bye bye...have a great week ahead!
Oh and yes before I leave I want to share this link to a lesser known blog-I think he writes pretty well and inspite of being short in length his posts do leave a lasting impression.Visit him if you can :)


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30 comments:

Nightwing said...

yeah...i can see you wrote it in a hurry...although it is good....but nothing extra-ordinary..i mean the subject matter...will be waiting for the story...and prepare to get murdered if it's a 55 fiction again!!! :D :D

atindriyo said...

why so sad?

freelancer said...

oh this was one painful...personally.
but u did justice to the feelings

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

i love the sad depiction of emotions as i often made sad and tragic poem..the last line solved all my whys about why she's sad like that..really a good one..:3

btw..yeah higurashi is bloody and psychologically disturbing in some ways but its story is fascinating..hmm..i love horror stories and bloody ones as well..im on season 2..and im enjoying it..

well..i think i must try earl and fairy,..ice hear so much about it and the illustration of the anime is pretty awesome..the guy protagonist is so handsome...(the blond one)

anyway..kimi ni todoke..im just on ep. 3..and im almost dying with its sweetness..so simple yet so captivating shoujo anime x)

reply on my blog if you're not busy >.<

Samadrita said...

@Nightwing:Lol who said anything about 55-fiction?And writing such a thing doesn't require any real work...an idea and 5 minutes is all you need.I'm working on a full-fledged story :)

@Atindriyo:Meh look who's talking-someone whose poems are so full of angst and depression that it could drive anyone insane. :P
Besides I'm not very good at poems of a happy mood.At the most I could deliver a message of hope.

Samadrita said...

@freelancer:Whoa look who's here-FL.Glad to see you on my blog!Yup this was meant to be a sad one.Thanks for the comment!

@Ayu:Mostly I can do well with a melancholy theme-dunno whether that makes me a sadist or not. T_T
Anyway do watch Earl and Fairy-the blonde earl is H-O-T and the fairy doctor is adorable.Very sweet series!

Chocolate Lover said...

Nice :)
really nice! :))

wisewit said...

Given that you just said you were wondering if I might be a bit depressed, I couldn't help wondering . . . but I figured it was more a matter of writing in a hurry. Keep in mind though that what you write can have an effect on your mood. If you write lots of depressing stuff, there's a possibility that you could end up feeling more depressed.

Oh, and by the way I did like it. It seems to express the mood of that kind of situation very aptly.

wisewit

sawan said...

*dislikes sad ending*
*likes the poem for the way its expressed*

Samadrita said...

@Chocolate lover:Hey there girl.Glad to see you on my blog and even gladder to know that you liked my poem.Yay! :D

@wisewit:I understand what you mean and I completely agree.But trust me I ain't sad at the moment or anything...(Atleast I think so)
Whew you liked it eh?You dunno how much that means to me! :) Thanks again.

@sawan:Actually my poems don't have an ending or beginning. They just express an emotion that's all.But yes mostly I'm good at penning down sad thoughts.I just can't get myself to write poems based on a happy mood...somehow.Thanks for the comment! :)

nesquarx.com said...

I really envy how you guys produce fiction so easily... Good poetry, bit haphazard, but enjoyable nonetheless.

Carl said...

Even though short n written in a hurry your poem did leave a lasting impression... : )

And oh thanks for linking me... Really appreciate it : )

Btw not all the stuff I write is small:p

Some of my older posts are long enough that I lose track of what the point of my story was hehehe hence I decided short n sweet is the best way to go...

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♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

same here..ive been doing lots of sadist poems..its easier to depict deep emotions like being sad ne..?

ill try to watch that after my anime list..so many~! <3
( / ・ω・)//!!!

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

(P.S. if you'll reply to this comment..pls. put it in my blog's comment box so that i can update my comments :D)

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

@Samadrita:cross game is a manga..? hmm...i have some prob. with taht..since i have only limited time OL..hehe..so patiently reading it would be a burden..i guess...maybe ill read it during my vacation..summer's coming~! ^_^ YAY!

oh~!!0.o! i remeber now! cross-game~! ive read a review of that some time ago..it already has live action film as far as i know..

^_^

Samadrita said...

@nesquarx:Hey that's not true you know.Sometimes I'm totally out of ideas when I'm desperately looking for some.And sometimes inspiration hits you when you're least expecting it.In any case thanks for the comment. :)

@Carl:Ah thank you for those kind words.
I haven't gone through your blog quite thoroughly so I guess I missed the older posts.I'll take a good look at everything sometime.
But I really enjoyed your shorter posts.. :)

P.S:Looks like you double-posted by mistake so I deleted the other one :)

Samadrita said...

@ayu:No no no you got it all wrong.Cross Game is not only a manga but an ongoing anime series as well.And it is brilliant.42 episodes have been subbed as of yet.
More on your blog.

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

(sory late reply..i just finished the ep6 of kimi ni todoke hehe i cried a bit..well actually ive first read the manga couple of months ago though i haven't finished it since its still on going..still even though i quite know the first few eps.i still cry and felt happy about the scenes.haha..guess im already hooked :3)

oh..i see..my bad...hehe..sorry >.< ive also heard about touch..:3 ill try to search on that and add it on my lists

anyway...im not suppose to say 'spoilers' but yeah..koizora is a tragic film..>.< i just watched it on youtube..but its story is rely great..though it has a sad ending..the director made it as though it wasn't that sad at all :3

MADHU RAO | (INDImag.COM) said...

Very good for a quickie. Will come back for the story..

Karthik said...

Lovey-dovey? :P
Had joker read this, he'd have asked, "Why so serious?" ;)
Though I usually prefer prose to poetry (and happy endings), I liked the voice in this poem. :)
Waiting for the story.....

☆Ths[Schrei]☆ said...

@Sammy:I know, and today only in the Newspaper they put an article about it! and that's so lame cuz they're putting it now only!! X(
(As in reply to my post)

-*-

And hey, you really write nice sad poems! :) They're really nice and the reader's all in a pleasure! :)

Shas said...

Beautifully expressed.

Samadrita said...

@ayu:Okay then I'll definitely watch Kimi ni Todoke.

@Madhu: Thank you and do come back! :)

@Karthik:Lovey-dovey?how?why?what?
Ah happy endings...don't we all love them?But life's tough.
Thanks for the comment!

Samadrita said...

@Schrei:Yup I know darling.Trust the snoozing government to come to life only when it's too late.
I'm glad you like the poem.

@Shas:Gracias!

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

thanks for liking it..i hope i can make a better one soon :)

Selenium said...

The Poem was very good :)
Full marks for the depiction of the emotions.

But...

I'm so damn bored of all the "Sad and depressed girl" poems (I dunno... today I've read a lot of them) that I'm now determined to write a happy one -__-

Thanks in advance for the inspiration. (I mean it...)

Quintessence Of Illusion said...

goth look...and now EMO poem...whats up with you gal...???
lol......neways nice post gal...its just like a sad version of Charulata...liked it

Samadrita said...

@ayu:Yep I liked your story girl. :)

@Selenium:I know sad-themed poems are getting monotonous.I'll try and write something differently next time.

@QOI:Lol everybody in college have asked me about the black nail-polish thing.No I haven't turned Goth.I just like the color.It's in fashion right now and I think it looks good on me...that's all.
Glad you like the post.

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

i thought you're going to say detective conan..i honestly haven't watched detective school q but i have some backgrounds with that due to my growing collection of a local anime magazine here :)

btw..i have a new post..kinda long one but i need some advice here T_T

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